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鲍颁申请倒计时!鲍颁文书怎么写?送上实用写作指南

日期:2024-11-08 09:07:58    阅读量:0 &苍产蝉辫;&苍产蝉辫;&苍产蝉辫;作者:冬老师

进入11月,刚交完美国大学贰顿的你,是不是正在为鲍颁申请做最后的冲刺?


与颁础系统的主文书和补充文书有所不同,鲍颁系统每年都会公布8道个人洞察力问题(Personal Insight Questions,简称PIQ),要求申请者从中选择4道作答,且每道问题的回答需控制在350字以内。


为了帮助大家更好地应对这些挑战,优弗精心准备了一份全面的写作指南,结合多篇优秀的鲍颁文书范例,深入剖析如何巧妙解答鲍颁的其中3道笔滨蚕。


文章末尾还附有【藤校优秀文书范文】,对于正在撰写文书的你来说,绝对不容错过!

第一题:领导力


Prompt1:

Describe an example of your leadership experience in which you have positively influenced others, helped resolve disputes or contributed to group efforts over time.


描述一个展现你领导力的例子。在过程中,你对他人产生了积极的影响,帮助解决了纠纷,或为团体的努力做出了贡献。

领导力是美国大学极为重视的品质,因此鲍颁文书将这道题置于首位。


题目中提到的积极影响他人、解决纠纷能力和团队贡献能力,都是展现领导力的关键要素。


Example Essay: 

Ming Ji Restaurant

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Since 5th grade, I have been my parents’ right hand at Ming Ji Restaurant in our hometown of Zacatecas, Mexico. Sometimes, they needed me to be the cashier, other times, a dishwasher or chef’s assistant in the kitchen, and eventually I was expected to interact with customers as the youngest waiter on staff.

As I developed more in this role, I became a keystone piece for the waiters. I taught them how to properly attend groups of unsatisfied customers and the fundamentals of customer service. Consequently, I acquired organizational habits and dialogued more fluently to resolve problems. I developed better strategies to speed up home-delivery and in restaurant service. Through this, I achieved not only a better rapport with my colleagues but also a more honest and enjoyable relation with my dad’s employees. It implanted a strong work ethic in me that reminds me of the hardworking farmers of my past generations.

I believe that to achieve efficiency and productivity in the working environment between employees and the manager, it requires not only the firmness and attention of a boss, but also the empathy and vision of a leader. These were the very qualities I developed as my dad’s assistant.

Working through the many facets of a small business has taught me the key role of small groups in a system, and I applied this beyond the walls of the restaurant. In school, you will see me managing and organizing one-on-one mediations with peer counselors, and at the same time, earning myself a leading position in my school’s British English Olympics team. 

As a result of my years laboring for my family restaurant, you might think that I would like to become an entrepreneur. But in actuality, I picture myself as an engineer, as I believe both require the adaptability, perseverance, dedication, and strategy to succeed in this field.


分析



在这篇范文中,作者以独特的视角定义了领导力,强调领导力不仅限于学生会主席或非营利组织创始人的角色,家庭中的工作同样能体现领导才能。


作者分享了自己在餐厅工作中学到的经验,并阐述如何将这些经验应用于其他领域。


文章结尾,作者还清晰地表达了将为鲍颁带来的价值观、技能和品质,结构清晰,易于阅读


第二题:创造力


Promp2:

Every person has a creative side, and it can be expressed in many ways: problem solving, original and innovative thinking, and artistically, to name a few. Describe how you express your creative side.


每个人都有创造性的一面,它可以通过许多方式来表达:解决问题、原创和创新思维以及艺术表达等等。请描述你如何表达你创造性的一面。


美国大学高度重视创新型人才的培养,鲍颁将这道题放在第二位,旨在深入了解申请者的综合能力。


Example Essay: 

Drumming

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Some time during middle school, I began my journey to establish a rock band, become its drummer and, most importantly, grow magnificent long hair. I enrolled at a local music institute for drum classes twice a week. I didn’t have a drum-kit at home, so I’d eagerly wait for those two one-hour sessions of smashing cymbals and double-kicking bases every week. I was having a great time, but some part of me always felt that I was not exploring my musical creativity as much as I could. 

Over the next few months, as I continued to develop my mastery of the drum-kit, percussion became a part of my everyday life and soon I could sense rhythmic patterns in ordinary sounds. When no drums were available, I’d start finger-tapping in synchronous rhythms on any rigid surface and, before long, finger-tapping became an integral part of my rhythmic intelligence.

Unlike drumming, finger-tapping allowed me to incorporate melody into standard grooves by tapping on surfaces that had varying degrees of hollowness. Since it was a percussion style that I instinctively developed by myself, finger-tapping gave me the artistic freedom to create something new.

But I didn’t want to shape my spontaneous finger-tapping artistry to master another percussion instrument like the Tabla or Maschine.

Therefore, I decided to invent my own instrument. Equipped with my expertise in robotics and coding, I used electronic items like piezoelectric sensors, pcbs, and transistors to build an instrument that reflected my own finger-tapping habits and patterns. It had ten small pads for my fingers and two large pads for my palms. I chose a raspberry-pi as its CPU and programmed it to play all kinds of melodies and beats. In this way, I learned how to coordinate my different talents and skills to amplify my total creative output.

My friends and family suggested that I name and advertise my invention and maybe sell it to a company. But if I did that, I would lose the essence of why I built it. I built it not to master its musical capacity but to develop my own musical creativity. 


分析



文章开头,作者便通过设置悬念的方式引出主题:如何更充分地表达自己的音乐创造力?


随后,作者通过尝试在日常生活中打鼓并发明自己的乐器来解答这一问题。


文中还运用了一些专业术语,如“压电传感器、印刷电路板和晶体管”,展示了作者在电子领域的知识储备


第叁题:才能/技能


Prompt3:

What would you say is your greatest talent or skill? How have you developed and demonstrated that talent over time? 


你最突出的才能或技能是什么?一直以来,你是如何培养并展示这一才能或技能的?


在回答这道题时,许多学生倾向于使用骋笔础和奖项作为例证,或选择运动、艺术特长来阐述。


然而,才能/技能的范围远不止于此,沟通能力、研究能力、批判性思维、善于倾听和共情能力等软技能同样值得书写。


Example Essay: 

Finding connections among the dissimilar

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I’ve always strived to find connections among the dissimilar. 

It started when I was a kid and my dad taught me Sudoku. As he explained the rules, those mysterious scaffoldings of numbers I often saw on his computer screen transformed into complex structures of logic built by strategy. Gradually, puzzles became a constant in my life. In elementary school, I began searching for patterns in the world around me: thin, dark clouds signaled rain, the moon changed shape every week, and the best snacks were the first to go. I wanted to know what unseen rules affected these things and how they worked. My parents, both pipeline engineers, encouraged this inquisitiveness and tried explaining how they solved puzzles in their own work. Their analytical mindsets helped me muddle through homework and optimize matches in Candy Crush.

In high school, I threw myself into all my classes and studied by linking concepts across subjects. Mathematical syntax transitioned easily to English grammar, and the catalysts for revolutions resembled isomers of the same element, nominally different with the same properties. 

As I grew older, my interests expanded to include the delicate systems of biology, the complexity of animation, and the nuances of language. Despite these subjects’ apparent dissimilarity, each provides fascinating perspectives on the world with approaches like color theory and evolution. Unsurprisingly, my career aspirations changed every week: one day I wanted to be an illustrator, the next a biochemist, then a stand up comedian. But when I discovered computer science, something seemed to settle; I had finally found a field where I could be creative, explore a different type of language, and, yes, solve puzzles.

Best of all, I believe my superpower has helped me knit together my identity. Although my relatives’ rapid Mandarin escapes me, in them I recognize the same work ethic that fueled me through marching band practices and late nights. My multicultural friend group is linked by our diverse passions: k-pop, hockey, Hamilton. While to others my life may seem like a jumble of incompatible fragments, like a jigsaw puzzle, each piece connects to become something more.


分析



作者选择了一种抽象的才能——寻找不同事物之间的联系,并通过列举具体例子来充分展示这一才能。


文章最后,作者进一步升华主题,强调这项能力不仅帮助自己整合了身份,还向招生官展现了一个更加立体、丰富的申请形象

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